Good to know Bloom looks like an ass at the beginning of this ep, just like she does in ours.
Will you PLEASE stop calling Layla "pink lips?" It's offensive. Do you somehow think it's funny? It's not. You know her name. Use it. If you want me to continue commenting on these, you'll stop it. Otherwise, I won't read them anymore.
Musa and Riven are alike because neither one likes to talk about their feelings. They're emotionally closed off.
I think Amentia's quite pretty for her species.
I don't think they have hiking outfits in Downland, so Amentia's probably never seen one before. Of course she'd think it was ugly. It IS ugly.
I'd drop a lot of the nickname usage. It gets confusing. You know the characters' names. Use them.
I liked how Amentia kept popping up in front of Brandon. Considering her fighting abilities, she probably is that fast and skilled.
4Kids had the seeds needing generic magic, which makes a lot more sense.
No major changes to discuss. Though I must say, when it comes to snappy dialogue, 4Kids is WAY better. They've got bad lines, but there are more than enough good ones to make up for it. This version seems to have mediocre dialogue.
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Date: 2006-06-20 03:46 pm (UTC)Will you PLEASE stop calling Layla "pink lips?" It's offensive. Do you somehow think it's funny? It's not. You know her name. Use it. If you want me to continue commenting on these, you'll stop it. Otherwise, I won't read them anymore.
Musa and Riven are alike because neither one likes to talk about their feelings. They're emotionally closed off.
I think Amentia's quite pretty for her species.
I don't think they have hiking outfits in Downland, so Amentia's probably never seen one before. Of course she'd think it was ugly. It IS ugly.
I'd drop a lot of the nickname usage. It gets confusing. You know the characters' names. Use them.
I liked how Amentia kept popping up in front of Brandon. Considering her fighting abilities, she probably is that fast and skilled.
4Kids had the seeds needing generic magic, which makes a lot more sense.
No major changes to discuss. Though I must say, when it comes to snappy dialogue, 4Kids is WAY better. They've got bad lines, but there are more than enough good ones to make up for it. This version seems to have mediocre dialogue.